TOMMY paces around his small, secluded flat waiting for the phone call that will make him or break him. TOMMY'S phone rings.
FRANKIE
"Meet me at the alleyway near ravenscourt park, i have the gear"
TOMMY
"OK, ill be there soon"
TOMMY picks up a wad of £20 notes and walks out the door.
EXT.DARKALLEYWAY.LATENIGHT
FRANKIE, holding a large suitcase and pacing up and down, waits for TOMMY.
TOMMY arrives and pulls a large wad of money out of his coat pocket, and hands it to FRANKIE.
An argument breaks out over the amount of money TOMMY has brought. The argument continues, and leads to a fight. TOMMY beats FRANKIE unconciouss and takes the suitcase, and his wad of money back. He runs away from the alleyway.
INT.TOMMYSROOM.MORNING
TOMMY receives a phonecall.
ANONYMOUS VOICE
"You don't know who you've messed with, son. You'd better leave £100,000 and the suitcase you took in the alleyway near Ravenscourt park by tomorrow morning, or you will die."
A lot of the script has been changed from the previous post. Firstly, the audience have been given more information about the meeting between Tommy and Frankie, and how the argument broke out. We have changed this aspect of the script because it adds more suspense to the opening scene, and provides a solid foundation for a cliffhanger later on. Also, the 'anonymous voice' has been edited to give the audience a deeper view on Tommys situation.
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