TOMMY paces around his flat, with a nervous look on his face. He waits for the phone call that will make him or break him. TOMMY'S phone rings.
FRANKIE
"Meet me at the alleyway near ravenscourt park, i have the gear. Do you have the money?"
TOMMY
"Yeah, of course i do, ill be there soon"
TOMMY walks towards a suitcase in the corner of his flat, picks it up and closes it. He proceeds to walk out of the flat.
EXT.ALLEYWAY.EARLYMORNING
FRANKIE, holding a large suitcase and pacing up and down, waits for TOMMY, with an anxious look on his face. We are shown TOMMYS shoes as he walks towards the alleyway.
Tommy arrives at the alleyway and shakes Frankies hand.
TOMMY
"Hello, mate. I have the money for you"
FRANKIE
"Good"
FRANKIE and TOMMY exchange briefcases. FRANKIE and TOMMY both check the suitcases.
FRANKIE
"THIS MONEYS FAKE! Do you think we're stupid?!"
Frankie grabs Tommy and a fight breaks out. Tommy pulls out a knife and stabs Frankie. He runs from the alleyway, taking both suitcases.
INT.TOMMYSROOM.EVENING
TOMMY receives a phonecall. He walks over to the phone and picks it up.
TOMMY
"Hello"
ANONYMOUS VOICE
"You don't know who you've messed with, son. Did you really think that we werent going to realise that the money is fake?!"
TOMMY
"I....I don't know what youre talking about"
ANONYMOUS VOICE
"Stop playing games with us son! Youre a fool, and you will pay for what youve done. No one rips us off, NO ONE!"
TOMMY
"Us? Whos us? Fra Frankie, is that you?"
ANONYMOUS VOICE
"Frankies dead, and you will be dead soon too."
The other end of the line cuts out, and Tommy puts the phone down.
A lot has been changed from the previous script. The script has been lengthened, and extra dialogue has been entered, so we get to know Tommy's character better, and understand his situation more. Also, the reason for the fight has been made clear- the fake money, to help us further understand the situation.
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